It stumbles on its wording a little. But I still think the new version is intelligible, and makes a nice point through humor. When someone puts down their phone and gives you their full attention nowadays, it is an expression of their utmost respect.
We could also add a version of John 10:18: “No one takes my phone from me. I lay it down of my own accord. I have authority to lay it down, I have authority to take it up.”