“THROUGH THE YEARS WE ALL WILL BE TOGETHER”: O BID OUR SAD DIVISIONS CEASE. Part four of Christmas in Depress-O-Vision. More flashbackery and so to bed. Read from the beginning here; or get the most recent section here. Two more sections coming: Christmas Day, and leavetaking.

Problems I have already identified (though you should feel free to email me with any elaborations on these problems, as well as any other things that aren’t working): 1. I use two different ways of presenting flashbacks (itals vs working it into the narrative). That’s just a stupid mistake and will be easy to fix in revision, though it’s doubtless annoying for you, the reader.

2. This story has no structure. I mean, it really doesn’t. It’s like an old baggy raveling sweater. No clue what to do about that.

3. Who is Diep? I don’t know and neither do you. Sigh.

As always, your comments and criticism are more than welcome. I am unsure why I’m writing this story, to be honest, except that it kept sitting in my head depressing me, and writing it was the only way to make it stop. Still, there are some things about it that I like, and I do think it’s salvageable in revision.

Wow, I’m really going for the hard sell here.