“GETTING FIRED”: BLOOD AND CHAMPAGNE. Oh man, did this story get completely out of my hands. The rough draft is finally done, but please don’t expect coherence. I love the ideas behind this piece, but I have to admit that the execution leaves much to be desired. Basically, when I revise I will have to add a lot of material. There are all kinds of dropped narrative stitches–Peter’s family is only the most obvious forgotten thread. Everything moves too fast and with even less coherence than the style (um… expressionist-parodic?) and POV (first-person present) would lead you to expect.

But! The rough draft is done. In this, the final episode, Amy appears in the flesh (too briefly, I know); the Bride of Frankenstein returns in a starring role; and the tone swings wildly from horror to romantic comedy, probably without success. Oh, I really hope I can fix the huge problems with this story, because there’s so much about it that I like. Your comments, as always, are welcome, though I’m just not sure this is done enough to be intelligible to anyone but me.

You can read the whole thing starting here, or just get the last scene here. In case you’re wondering, I do know what the music is in the final scene, even though Peter doesn’t. The JFK mention is a hat tip. I’m thinking this–more specifically, this. Yes, “Getting Fired” is ultimately all about my sentimental side. But it’s not as bad as that makes it sound.

Man, this whole post is like one big Caveat Lector sign.

Next week: “Kissable Pictures.” This one will make sense. (I hope.)